A quote I did not forget about, but had lost its exactness and, failing miserably, tried to paraphrase for the past two years

“We are nowadays surprised to find that such an official bit of work, made "to order" by a court poet for a special occasion, should be good poetry. But in ages when the arts had their full health, no one would have understood our surprise. All the great poets, painters, and musicians of old could produce great work "to order." One who could not would have seemed as great a humbug as a captain who could navigate or a farmer who could farm only when the fit took him.”

C.S. Lewis--Reflections on the Psalms (Chapter 12)

Boy does this give me a headache

After a suggestion from a friend, I decided to take another look at chapter one.  I feel like an idiot.  The story is there.  Beautiful.  I love it.  But every time I read those first two chapters, there are times where the flow breaks down and just sounds like crap.  Well, after my friend saying the flow was rather choppy I deciding to really scrutinize my work.  Ha, my work, as if anything is truly mine.  But that is a good thing.  Anyway, I realized that I was not consistent with the POV.  This story is third person, yes, but told from the POV of two characters (never in the same chapter).  So why, do I have paragraphs at various point containing third person omniscient POV describing things in a way for the reader.  No no no.  If this is from a character’s POV then some items, or situations, would not be described in such a way.  Which of course, was why flow, especially in the first chapter, was so damn choppy.  Hopefully, I fixed that.  But we will see.